Welcome back! I always work all day on Sundays, so I miss hopping along the blogs along with the rest of you. I always bring up the end of the parade. I like to call it “fashionably late”.
On with this week’s six, where we join Bronwynn as she was just stabbed in a parking garage.
“Help,” she choked. The attendant wasn’t in her line of sight, and her voice wasn’t strong enough to get his attention even if he were. Her vision blurred, and she sat on her heels, and fell back against the wheel of her car. The pain was almost more than she could bear. She fumbled on her belt for her cell phone, her hand shaking and slick with blood. Each beat of her heart sent blood gushing through her hand, no matter how hard she tried to stifle it.
Sigh. Every week I open this WiP and wonder why I’m not writing in it. I need more fingers! Be sure to check out the other S3 posters at the official website! See you next week.
Poor Bronwynn, she’s been stuck with this injury for weeks!
Still stressing for her!
I hope she is okay!
Wow! This is such a vivid scene. Great snippet. Hope she’s okay.
Ewwww! In an awesome way!
Eek! Hope she gets through it ok.
Awesome snippet
Alanna, you can’t leave us like that!!
These snippets are wonderful and terrible. So vivid.
Really powerful and vivid. If I might make a small suggestion…with the line “The pain was almost more than she could bear”–could you further up the wonderful tension here by detailing what the pain felt like? Was it slicing, burning, eviscerating?–make us feel it even more! GET BACK TO THIS PROJECT–sounds so good!
Alanna — you DO need more fingers. Too good not to finish.
Loved the blood gushing with each beat of her heart.
Can’t wait to see how she is going to get herself out of this mess!
Gripping! Keep writing this!
So much for cool-headed. Now she is in real trouble!
Great description! Good six.
Good job!
Each week (each moment in the WIP) Bronwynn’s situation seems more desperate. I’m eager to read on to see how…or if…she survives.
Great six.
I wonder why you’re not writing on it too. It’s really good. I hope she manages to get rescued soon.
Vivid and memorable. Great six!
gem
How terrifying all that blood and not being able to do anything to staunch it. Yikes. Makes me wonder how she is going to get out of this situation.
I’m with you on the needing more fingers. Never enough time to get everything done.
Oh wow, gotta know what happens next!!
My goodness, this scene is *so* intense!
oh wow! Need more!
I want someone to rescue Bronwynn, like now. You’ve got me emotionally attached to her. We read all about her everyday life before, and now that something has happened to her, my heart is racing. Hopefully someone will come to help next week.
Oh so exciting and I hope someone saves her soon!
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really vivid scene, hope she is saved soon!
Not a good place to be. Great six.
That last line is horrific. And awesome.
A story I would definitely love to read more of.
Oh noes! We need a hero! Quick!
To know that help is so close, yet so far away! Ugh…the week can’t pass by fast enough!
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Heart-wrenching post. I do hope that there is a resolution (positive, please?) next week! 🙂
Why aren’t you working on this? I love reading it each week!
Poor girl 🙁 Really hoping she gets out of this somehow.
Oh my goodness! Poor thing 🙁 She’ll get out of it, though, right? Right???
I hope see gets help soon!
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She can’t take much more. YOu really need to get her out of this situation!
Oh! what a tease! life or death! Love it!!
Sounds intense.
Serious suspense–life and death is about the strongest hook there is!
I like the tension, that you’re taking it slow to show whether she’ll be saved or not
well written!
Oh no. She’s bleeding. I’ve got to know what happened,